sorry for being a bit later than I estimated
nitpicks/small stuff:
Ticonderoga
I'd personally put the footnote explaining Ticonderoga class on the actual classification rather than the conproc
The effects of SCP-XXXX were first noted by Dr. Markova Yazdovsky in 2043 and later theorized and compiled into an SCP file by her granddaughter, Dr. Vitsina Yazdovsky.
Since SCP-XXXX's classification, Dr. Yazdovsky has spearheaded investigation and research into SCP-XXXX. Specifically, Dr. Yazdovsky has been working to uncover the source of SCP-XXXX. To this extent, several experiments have been conducted to test the limitations of SCP-XXXX.
This is … fine? But to me it reads a bit more like a news article than an SCP description if you get what i mean. I think the first paragraph/parts of the first paragraph would be better suited in the addendum maybe?
SCPS Draugr's MAGEs detected a minor increase in ARad
(I'm going into super nitpick area now) I'm not sure the timeline of the addendum versus the description and this may be perfectly fine, but this contradicts the bit in the description that very clearly says that zero ARad has been detected in correlation with XXXX
Dr. Yazdovsky: But it's a spectral entity, a ghost. But we checked on every person we know who's died while in space, but none of them have been active enough […]
This section gets to be a little bit info-dumpy, especially since Yazdovsky is actively hurtling through space dodging asteroids left and right. It sort of makes me just want to skim over it and sours any drama the scene might have had. Not really sure where else you'd put this information though is the problem
More in-depth comments to follow
keflanes — 02/22/2024 8:09 PM
Overall, I find it to be really sweet and a pretty unique idea (at least I haven't seen anything like it). I did have spoilers for the ending given I read the comments above & im pretty sure i skimmed the whole thing at some point a few days ago. Regardless, I liked the ending.
I think my only real gripe is the pacing during the logs and really just the logs in general. I never really felt emotionally attached to any of the characters and they personally felt a bit bland/lacking any memorable personality. They're just sort of .. there and doing things if that makes any sense.
Other than that, it seems pretty solid. I'd agree with DianaBerry in saying that there is definitely room for more meat if that makes sense. It wouldn't suffer from it at all. And that may be because the logs take up around half of the article but aren't really memorable at all. If the dialogue/characters were made to be more endearing I can see it possibly making up for the lack of meat on the article.
I think with the article as it is in its current state, I'd probably no-vote, leaning +1